Originally Posted by JMS
I couldn't get past 3 minutes. Your jokes aren't funny and your delivery sucks. Your 'jokes' make you look creepy and your audience feel awkward, that's why the only laughs you got were in response to the awkwardness. 'I was working a summer job as the county morgue and decided to bone this dead woman, the pathologist walks in on us and I was like, whats up doc.'
Work on your jokes first, spend time writing them and then worry about delivery.
And here I was trying to let the poor guy down easily and then I come back to read your post right after mine it is was more in line in what I thought as well but just didn't have the heart to tell him until someone else did. So, yea, "Your jokes aren't funny and your delivery sucks" is just about right.