I couldn't get past 3 minutes. Your jokes aren't funny and your delivery sucks. Your 'jokes' make you look creepy and your audience feel awkward, that's why the only laughs you got were in response to the awkwardness. 'I was working a summer job as the county morgue and decided to bone this dead woman, the pathologist walks in on us and I was like, whats up doc.'
Work on your jokes first, spend time writing them and then worry about delivery.
Last edited by JMS; 02-22-2013 at 05:48..